Monday, March 8, 2010

Blog 1

Name: Sharod
Age:19
Hometown: Brooklyn
Major: Veterinary Technician
Hobbies: Dancing, playing instruments, and writing music
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  1. Shanice C.March 23, 2010 at 11:32 AM

    Hello Sharod! I have carefully read your draft essay and I found it to be very interesting. However, I noticed that your paragraphs introduced different topics which somehow through me off because you did not include your topics in your introduction paragraph. This made it a little difficult for me to understand where you where you were trying to go with this essay. You started your paragraphs pretty well;its just that your essay would be a little more clear if you add the topics you plan to discuss in your essay (i.e. tone and symbolism).

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